Tuesday, 15 September 2015

By:Christian.L Market Day Recount ( enjoy)

Walt: write an interesting and detailed recount .

Buying, selling, hook people in, it’s all part of market day.That right guys we at pt England school in the our new classrooms last week we had a market day on Friday. If  you didn't we had a trade fair 4 weeks ago and  last week on Friday it was the day we got our stuff. I decided to buy something for home. We had our own money that we use for our market day it called “ Pt and pieces”.   

Do you want to know  my trade and enterprise group?, well  that I in is home ware. We make home ware  like making candles, soap and air freshener. we made a lot of candles and some kids was making a soap all by themselves! how cool is that!          

We had to work our butts off for the “set up”. So in that case it was cool and a bit hard working. Us boy had to get the tables getting ready to go and we had to get brooms and sweep the floor. I was the man working guy, I had the line the tables up, put them down, put them up, move them,carry them and pull them.
I was going to buy first and then sell last. It was One hour to go we had a plan take turns for selling and buying. Their are 4 girls and I'm the only boy in my team, so that makes 5. It was my turn first to buy and along with 3 girl. We all slitted up up the other two girls was selling. I was going to be a ice block first, there was cup size ice blocks and little small cup size. I took 1 of the small one, it had two flavours there was ice and some kind of weird gooey red thing that you would like. I was wolfing it down with it tasty,red,flavour and it cold,wet ice. I had 5 pt in my hand ( 5 bucks ) it costed me 20 pieces ( 20 cents ) I buy the 2 girls ice block as well.   

Then it was time for my turn to be the boss of the shop. we sell a lot of candles and the money that we made was 10.50 pt. It was so epic. Then we put our money together with the other groups I by one of the candle for another group it was red and blue and I buy two loom bands a pizza slice, a loom band batman necklaces and a rainbow loom band.

then it was over we was cleaning up pack everything away and counting the money up.well that all I have good-bye for now!  

Recount Writing

Write for my reader
I've tried to think about my reader
My writing shows some awareness of reader because my writing is quite clear and I have tried to interest my reader.
My writing is easy to understand and I have tried to tell the reader what it was like to be there by giving details and my thoughts.
My writing really considers audience as reader because I have kept their interest and made them feel like they know exactly what it was like for me.
I tried to meet the purpose
My text goes some way towards meeting the purpose
The message is clear in some parts of the recount.
My text fully meets the purpose.
The message is clear all through the recount.
My introduction does not yet clearly orientate or hook in my reader.
My introduction gets some buy in from audience and they can understand what I am going to write about.
My introduction hooks in my reader and it is clear what I am writing about.
My introduction wows my reader!
Paragraph Topics
My paragraphs are confused and don't follow my plan.
I have tried to follow my plan.
Most my paragraphs are about 1 big idea and I have added some detail.
My paragraphs have some complex as well as simple sentences. Post paragraphs give details about 1 big idea.
I have followed the paragraph topic in my plan.
My paragraphs have complex and simple sentences. Paragraphs all give details about 1 big idea.

Task description:  we have to  writing a full recount about our Market day. we need to be thinking about the what happen and writ the main story and  rubrics to help guide our writing. 

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